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so lie down on the traintracks

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so lie down on the traintracks, see if we cause a traincrash

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made from a cut-up season ticket

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I didn't realize what category this was at first, so I apologize if I'm late in posting. I frankly LOVE the idea of getting inspiration for poetry from junk hanging around like train tickets and receipts, so five stars for the medium you used. The only flaw I can see is that some of the letters are a tad small and difficult to make out, which interrupts the flow of reading. The poem itself is concise and striking, and I love the use of punctuation. (The little heart is cute too, but the white bit on the top makes it look a bit lopsided.)

Heading over to your other piece now~~